The specific changes I made in this essay were fixing passive voice and expletive construction. Both passive voice and expletive construction are things I struggle with in every essay. I think I personally have a hard time with these two things because I write as if I were to talk. Because I talk mostly in passive voice, it carries over into my writing. I did not know that expletive construction was bad in writing in the sense that it contains no meaning and is very vague and contains almost no meaning. Expletive construction is very natural in speech, and I did not know how much I used it until I started writing for this class. Another thing I worked on revising in this essay was my analysis of quotes. When I use quotes, I only analyze the quote at a skin deep level. I miss out on many opportunities for more analysis and analysis deeper than surface level. For example, in this essay, I missed an analysis opportunity for why I thought Guidry chose to use the imagery of “pieces of metal or crushed cans floating among catfish and bass” while the narrator of her story was fishing in her bayou; another area I improved my analysis was why Guidry chose to use the word “stream” in describing the French language.