As for critical response #2, I thought I did relativity well since I got a 9.05/10. However, I realized that there are still some simple errors that come around the corner even when you get an A. I was proud of my A, but I still want to learn and improve from it. A higher grade does not mean you are at your peak but that you are getting better.

The first revision I made was that I changed the title to “Three Writers and Their Passion” since my old title was not original and needed to be more creative. Additionally, I made sure to not underline the title anymore since it is my own title and is MLA format. Next, I removed “showing passion for a book” since I am repeating myself when I said “finding the right passion for books” earlier in the sentence. As for the next correction, I put quotation marks around “How to Mark a Book” since it is the title of someone’s essay. Additionally, I removed the word “basically” since it can be considered a banned word and has no use in being in my sentence. It is just making the sentence wordier, and I did not necessarily need it. Finally, I removed the phrase “since it is not a passage” since a thesis can be in a video as well and does not only have to be in a passage.

It was quite helpful for Ms. Hays to provide positive feedback and helpful tips on improving my essay. She pointed out all the little flaws in my papers; however, she was fascinated and pleased with me for using citations when they were not necessary. I learned that if you go above the requirements, you can please your audience and even see improvement in your writing. Ms. Hays usually only gives A’s if a student goes above and beyond; therefore, I went a little above and beyond and was rewarded for my work. My thought process has changed since rereading and revision this minor assignment since it taught me to be more considerate of comments and how to improve on them. I still have some improve regardless of the grade I get since I am nowhere near perfect. If I want to become a better writer, I need to work my hardest and learn from my mistakes one step at a time.