Revising this essay made me realize how different a process revision can be from paper to paper; while some of my other revisions on this site were focused on content, this revision had a much heavier emphasis on technical issues.

       Now, this is not to say that I had perfect content; there were definitely some changes I made to how I presented my analysis in order to strengthen my argument, but overall I was very satisfied with the conclusions I came to.

       I first started by looking over the initial comments, eliminating expletive construction from my paper. The next big task was tracking down all of the passive voice that I so carelessly used! Tense has always been something that I have struggled with in writing, mainly because I am not being as attentive as I should when writing my paper. I want to make sure that I am writing in the correct tense as failing to do this can result in awkward wording. I also chose to add a subtitle to my original title, so readers had more of an idea of what my essay was about.

       Which brought me to my next task: polishing up sentence structure! There were many sentences where I overused the comma; they definitely should have been broken up into multiple sentences, which I quickly remedied. Reading through the paper again I caught a lot of awkward wording that I felt made me lose a lot of credibility. It is important to sound intelligent and focused when you are writing an analysis, and I think that my revisions helped that.

       The last thing that I revised was very important, and that was fixing up my source boundaries. In my first body paragraph I failed to provide a citation, which made it hard for readers to see where the source ended and my content began. I quickly fixed this as this not only caused confusion, but also could have made it seem as if I were stealing the author’s ideas! I was definitely not trying to do this and inserted an in-text citation to make this clear. I also revised my works cited to reflect the correct format.

       I had a lot of fun revising this paper and I learned a lot. I know that I need to be a lot more careful when I am writing papers in order to avoid silly tense errors, as well as more serious ones such as source boundary. I thoroughly enjoyed analyzing this book and I hope that the revisions strengthened my argument.