This revision and assignment has helped me learn and exercise looking at the writer’s point of view and what exactly the author wants the audience to understand. By knowing what the writer wants and how he gets his purpose across, the audience can take a step back and not be swayed by the writer’s style of writing and can see the bigger picture. I have removed sentences that were useless and did not contribute to the main point of the essay. I have fixed minor grammatical mistakes, rewrote sentences that stated incorrect facts, added in and redid my sources for paraphrasing and quotes, italicized all proper titles and capitalized all proper pronouns, made my concluding sentence more concise and alphabetized my works cited page. These revisions were guided by Professor Mary’s comments and helped me fixed the core problems of my essay.