Revising this paper has taught me a few lessons. I started by looking at the paper’s objective of evaluating the similarities between the student code and Howard White’s article. My original essay did this but it didn’t expand on each one individually. In my revised essay, I highlight each article’s claim and then compare the two. For each claim, I also brought up its magnitude. I think that this is important because the two articles are on complete opposite sides of the spectrum. White argues for a very small detail, while the student code supports a global scale. This is a huge aspect of both arguments and I completely ignored it in my original draft. I also tied in more quotes from the articles to give the reader a better sense of their purpose. I feel that my original essay failed to convey the author’s message accurately. My revised essay does this much better and it is clear to the reader what each article is supporting. To make my essay more complex, I also looked at the difference between the two articles. I tied this in with the addition of the magnitude, since the scope of each article was the biggest difference. Other than these high order concern, I correctly formatted the quotes by putting my punctuation before the closing quotation mark and fixed a few sentence fragments.