When I reread this movie review I wrote couple months ago. I found that I included enough materials and ideas in my original essay. However, for some reason, the essay sounded really weird to me. After reread couple times, I figured that the awkwardness came from the poor flow of the essay. How I revised the paper was that I divided up the essay into five paragraphs. The first paragraph is the introduction of the documentary In Whose Honor? The second paragraph is a summary about how the whole story started. The third paragraph talks about the effects of using repeated scenes and traditional Indian music. In the fourth paragraph, I discuss both sides of the argument. For the last paragraph, I connect the issue with my personal experience, and talk about what I would do if I were in Charlene’s shoes. In such order, the essay becomes much easier for readers to read and understand.

When I wrote the essay and the other discussion quiz about this documentary, I clearly stated that I did not think Charlene and her community did a good job on protesting this issue. Ms. Mary commented on my assignments saying she believed that Native American Studies Program and Native American House were better ways to honor Native Americans. I kept thinking about the issue from both sides during the semester. Growing up in a different culture environment, I still choose to persist on my own opinions on this topic. It is not about who is right or who is wrong. The revision of this assignment really helps me understand the idea that people often have different beliefs. We need to learn to look at a topic from different perspectives and respect different opinions even though we may not agree on them.