Reflection

As I stated in my metaphor, a house is not put up on the real estate market until it’s touched up and finished. Similarly, you can’t successfully sell your thesis without concluding your essay in a strong manner. Hence, I decided to substantially revise my conclusion for this assignment.  My original document had a good conclusion according to Professor Hays. However, I felt my conclusion still could have been improved to address the true magnitude of industrial agriculture. I addressed this issue by incorporating the government’s relation to genetic engineering in agriculture. I discussed how the government should move forward with respect to this topic in order effectively design a policy that will not create negative externalities.

Couple of minor errors I fixed were changing the format of the date, adding a word count, improving the title, fixing grammatical errors, and deleting expletive constructions. My initial title was good, but it lacked detail. It did not specify that the assignment was a synthesis of sources. Thus, I changed the title of the document to “The Impact of Genetic Engineering in Agriculture: A Synthesis of Sources.” I fixed couple areas in my paper where I placed commas outside of the quotation. Finally, I used the expletive construction “there is” when discussing the flaw behind Blake Hurst’s view. I revised the sentence the following way: “However, I find one flaw with Hurst’s argument here. ” This revision made the sentence concise and prevented the use of an unnecessary expletive construction.

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After I completed this assignment, I learned the value of concluding effectively. A conclusion helps you get your last word out regarding the topic in order to make your audience think profoundly regarding the matter. It is more than just reinstating  your thesis. By leaving your audience with a new thought, it motivates them to explore and dive deep into the topic themselves. Moving forward, I hope to conclude my essays in a strong manner, so I can make my audience feel satisfied for reading my paper.